On a possitive note, the idea for the story is very cool, I would love to get caught up in a role-playing world like that!

A few thoughts.
One thing that I kept thinking as I listened to DA was “When are they going to go on the assigned quest?” they just hang out in this town. The super wish granting item mentioned at the beginning of the story seemed like fore shadowing of a possible solution to there entrapment and not one of them thought to look for it..
Second & this didn’t have to happen but I sort of hoped it would. At the end I’d have liked to find them back at the apartment the whole escapade rather than magic having been part of the game scenario. Why? well it would be quite a hoot to hear them rag on each other one last time.(King Cronearth got taken down bitch what you gota say about that..)
Finally criticism of a sort
Again I really enjoyed DA & I’m in my thirties but for me the novel reads as Young Adult I’d say 16-21 if that were the target audience the explicit language and sexual content probably seem inappropriate to publishers who must consider to whom they will market a book. Sadly I don’t have a solution to offer, Henrys abuse of power rings true it would be awkward to white wash him, heck if you did it would likely eviscerate the story..

http://lonewolfsageco.com/main/?p=30

http://freshly-ground.blogspot.com/2009/04/audiobook-review-darkage-by-kirk.html

It was tolerable, borderline enjoyable.

However, the narration and writing style makes it difficult to listen to – I’m now continuing with the book out of sheer determination more than anything else.

You need to loosen up and speak at a more natural place – you’re suffering. From. The worse case, of. The Shatners. I, have ever. Heard

Also, your writing is a little too explanatory, particularly in the opening chapters. You create a great scene between characters, and then throw in something unnecessary like “William worked the next character into the game” (two or three minutes after that character has been introduced).

Finally, there seems to be an unnecessary focus on sex so far. I’m willing to give you the benefit of the doubt and assume it’s because your writing as your teenage characters, but it comes across as more than a little juvenile.

I’ll stick with it, and so far it’s enjoyable enough, but you have some things you need to work on before DarkAge 2.

Maybe as a tie in to the next instalment, you could ask the fans to send in some artwork of the darkage charatcers. It would be good to have a character history page on your site to get to know them better.

Although I have messed up on the pronunciations of many a word.

Hades is pronounced correctly in the podcast. This is John’s character and not the Greek God of the underworld, therefore it does not have to be pronounced hey-deez. John pronounces this differently on purpose. Although he wants to associate his character with death, he does not want to be the Greek God of the underworld. (Not B.S. to cover my own lack of oratory skills but FACT, I’m more than happy to admit when I messed up on something – example katana.)

Thanks again for everyone’s support.

There are some major league issues that have not been resolved by the end of the novel. Even with a sequel, there needs to be some closure on things like what happens with James and John. What about William? What happens when a player character dies in Dark Age? I don’t really know where a sequel will go from the end of this story. If these loose ends were tied up, it would be a great novel on it’s own, but I have a feeling that a sequel will just draw things out.